Show Not Tell
Tell sentence: It was a cold and rainy day.
Show sentence: on a dark, freezing day and very cold day this tree fell because of the strong wind it was zooming thru the leaves making noises
Tell sentence: I went to the beach.
Show sentence: squishy sand in between my toes nice breeze and nice coldness
Tell sentence: Carol bought new shoes because hers broke.
Show sentence: dust in between my toes, toes sticking out of it and laces broken and squeaking noises when he walks
Hello Letoria
ReplyDeleteI had just finish reading your story about show not tell,It would be really good and nice if you didn't leave any caps between.
Kind Regards Brooklyn